Thursday, 28 February 2013

Newsjack: Recorded but Cut

Today, I just got the most awesome email from Newsjack.

From what I am aware, my sketch on ways to avoid a drone attack was definitely recorded :D
The pope sketch may have gotten recorded but it's unclear.

Gutted that I wasn't at the recording but thrilled it was good enough to get recorded.

As I said, i will post the sketches up soon.

Email I received is below.   Happy days :)   My writing is defo improving.

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Dear all,

We're just writing to say that, although you didn't get anything into last night's programme, you got something into the recording script. We always over-record, and there could be many reasons why things get dropped - they might not quite work out loud, or the audience might not get it, or simply we needed to lose thirty seconds. Whatever the reason, we did think your stuff was good - but we've only got twenty-eight minutes of airtime...

So, thank you for contributing to the recording - and please do keep submitting material - we look forward to reading your stuff next week.

Thanks,
Lyndsay Fenner & Ed Morrish
Producers, Newsjack.

Sunday, 24 February 2013

Sketches I've written this weekend

Okay, so following from last week.

I wrote two new sketches this weekend that I have submitted to newsjack.   I will post them up at some point.   The two sketches are:

  • 22 ways to avoid drones
  • Pope's last day at work
So, i think i have covered one major story and one minor story
  • Pope's last day (major story)
  • 22 ways to avoid drones (minor story)
In these 2 sketches, I've worked on making it sound right (especially the pope one).   
  • I've read them out loud, doing the accents that i think are appropriate
  • I've considered the voice talents of the cast (pope voice, boris johnson voice)
  • I've covered one major story with some fresh angles on it (hopefully, i.e. the pope).
  • I've avoided the typical interview style (pope one is a conversation, 22 ways is a public service broadcast)
  • I've made sure that where possible voices are gender neutral except where avoidable (i.e. the pope).   So the pope's aide could be a male or female voice
  • I think they are funny
All in all, i think my writing has improved from the week before.   Will it be strong enough for newsjack   I dunno.   I have also submitted the drone one to newsrevue and treason show.   They are a slightly different version with more visual jokes and some extra jokes that would work outside of the radio format.  I will probably send the pope one to newsrevue also.

I don't expect any of these to be performed yet.   It would be nice if they were but at the moment I am just glad my writing is improving.   As I said, i will post them up soon.

I may write one more sketch this weekend if something funny is inspired.

The major stories that I would expect newsjack to cover this week include:

  • Downgrading of UK AAA rating
  • Oscars (hopefully i will write something on this)
  • Foreign Doctors must speak english (i suspect loads of people will do sketches on this)
Stories that are big that they probably won't do a sketch on for taste reasons (unless a tasteful sketch is written)

  • Oscar Pistorius
  • Cardinal O'Brien
  • Nick Clegg and Lord Rennard (i suspect this will be covered though probably from the nick clegg angle rather than the lord rennard angle)
  • US forces to leave afghanistan
And of course anything that happens on Monday or Tuesday (covered by the writers room or anyone who writes a sketch on a story that occurs before 12)

UPDATE - Monday 25th of February

Wrote one more sketch last night called wonka.com , which is a parody on the wonga.com adverts on britain losing it's AAA status


Useful links for writing topical / non topical sketch comedy

Newsjack
This is an article from newsjack producer lyndsay fenner on submitting sketches

I guess the key thing to take out of this is be original and be persistent.

http://www.ideastap.com/ideasmag/the-knowledge/newsjack-producer-lyndsay-fenner-open-door-radio-comedy

Mitchell and Webb
This is mitchell and webb talking about sketch writing.

Key points:  Strong premise and Strong characters

http://www.guardian.co.uk/books/2008/sep/22/comedy2

Sam Bain and Jesse Armstrong

I haven't watched this one yet

http://guru.bafta.org/sam-bain-and-jesse-armstrong-comedy-writing-masterclass

BBC Academy

This was pretty helpful too.  I need to relisten though, forgotten the points, oops.

http://www.bbc.co.uk/academy/collegeofproduction/podcast/radio/sketch_writing_podcast


Sitcom Pilot Scripts

This is kinda cool.

I'm not planning to write a sitcom, as i said trying to crack sketch comedy.  However found a collection of pilot scripts for sitcoms.   I'm interested in them as I'm hoping it will help me improve the way i write for speech and characters.


it's got some pretty cool ones like:

  • 30 Rock
  • Big Bang Theory
  • New Girl

https://sites.google.com/site/tvwriting/


Also BBC Writers room has some good scripts like:


  • Miranda
  • Mrs Brown's Boys



http://www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scripts/

Saturday, 23 February 2013

Newsjack - more thoughts on sketches

So,

Having performed a very brief analysis of tbe last episode 2 and episode 1 of series 8 of newsjack there are some points that I kinda feel that I have to cover.

12 & 13 sketches
In a episode of newsjack there are around 11-15 sketches in episode (in those 2 episodes it was 12 & 13).

28 Minute show
Newsjack is a 28 minute show.

24 minutes of sketches and 4 minutes of one-liners and jackapps
According to this posting from the producers about jackapps and one-liners.   Basically they are aiming for 24 minutes of sketches.

Average of 2 minute sketches
Therefore we can assume that based on average of 12 sketches within a 24 minute period.   Newsjack are looking for around 12 sketches of 2 minutes to fill that 24 minutes.   Now, nobody ever complains about a short sketch.   So if you submit a 1 minute sketch, awesome, that will mean that you could have 13 or 14 sketches.   Are they likely to have 24 sketches of 1 minute.   Somehow I doubt it.
More importantly, are they likely to take a sketch of 5 minutes.   Hahaha, no ways.
So aim for a 2 minute sketch.  If it's shorter, cool.   If it's longer, time to edit.  Do you really need that joke?

12 sketch average
So this is something, I have been getting really wrong.   And it's kinda obvious.   They have 12 sketches to cover the news.   Therefore if you are covering minor news items for your sketches, you are reducing your chances of getting on the show.   I kinda thought that if i covered less well known stories then I would have a better chance of getting on the show.   Totally wrong!!!!!!   I'll talk about this a little more on the next posting.

Major news stories
BUT, think about this.  They have to cover the major news items.   They have to!!!  Wouldn't it be weird for episode 1 for them not to have some sketches on the pope, or horsemeat?   You couldn't have 12 sketches taken up by minor news stories.    So write sketches on the major topics.   Now that's not to say that if you write a brilliant sketch on minor news stories that it won't get on.   I think good writing will probably get on regardless.   But you are making it harder for yourself.  I think.   Just my thoughts. And the producers seem to confirm this on one of their videos, where they talk about people sending in minor stories.   They said they want fresh angles on the major new stories.

So, write sketches on major news stories with fresh-angles.   Confine smaller stories to oneliners and jackapps.

Will talk about this a bit more in a next posting.

Characters
So i want to the recording of episode 1, and did my analysis.   So one of the things, I am learning about writing sketches.   And I haven't yet cracked this.   It's not really about the funny lines.
It's about an interesting and fresh premise and angle.   However it's all about the characters.   Listen to the show.   How does Justin speak.   What voices does pippa or nadia tend to do.   What impressions does lewis like to do.

Some of them are pretty obvious.  within 2 episodes Ed Milliband, Brian Cox were both covered by lewis.  Look at previous episodes, Silvio berlusconni and boris johnson appeared.     So if a news item appears where one of these characters are prominent, you can probably bet your ass that you have a better chance of getting on air (if you write to the character, do fresh jokes, and give it an interesting angle).    Same sort of point for Nadia, if you can have characters that bring that bring out her voice talents, do it.   Interesting accents, geordie / norther accents, playful gurlie accents etc.

Will talk about this a bit more later!!!

Use the cast
4 cast members.   2 are female, 2 are male.   one male cast member does lots of impressions (lewis).  one male cast member has a serious voice and mainly does interview style stuff (justin).  3 female members of cast.  Pippa tends to do the more serious voices, nadia tends to do the more playful gurlie voices (she's closer to lewis).    Sorry to offend if I am wrong, I am just saying what I have seen from the 2 episodes.   I haven't seen margaret perform so i can't comment.
So, my point is if you don't write to this cast, you have a problem.
If you just write male roles, you ain't getting on.   If you are not wrting to their talents, you ain't getting on.
Make interesting sketches that can be performed by male and female performers and use their voice talents.

It's not about dialog
Again something, i missed and my own writing doesn't reflect.   When you listen to the show.  Every sketch is about the character and the voice.   Funny dialog doesn't necessarily doesn't translate to a good sketch.  Every sketch has interesting voices etc.  You have to write for the characters.

Anyways, I hope this helps me improve my writing in the future and maybe you



Friday, 22 February 2013

Newsjack Series 8 Episode 2

A quick breakdown on the type of sketches in newsjack series 8, episode 2

Justins Intro One liners
Asteroid Size Sketch Scene
Private School advert Sketch Advert
Reintro of 10p tax rate, ed milliband Sketch Scene
Story on Ducess of Cambridge Sketch Interview
Jackapp Jackapp Jackapp
Diary of pandas about to have sex Sketch Diary
Meteorite Sketch Scene
Australian Tourist Board Sketch Informercial
Asteroid with Brian Cox Sketch Interview
Jackapp Jackapp Jackapp
Return of silvio berluscionni Sketch Speech
Chucky Checker Apps Suing Sketch Advert
Morrison buying blockbuster stores Sketch Scene
Orchestrated Tweets Sketch Interview
Corrections Corrections Corrections
This week This week This week

my thoughts on this later

Newsjack series 8 episode 1 breakdown

I thought I might list the type of sketches that were aired on this episode.   Might help me figure out the beat of the show.   Basically what I should write for what format.

Pre Intro Punwatch
Justins Intro One liners
Pope Resigination Sketch Scene
Ed Milliband - 2nd job declaration Sketch Scene
Barclays bank Job cuts and being more moral Sketch Interview
Disneyland amusement park Sketch Advert
Jackapps Jackapps Jackapps
Diary of Chris Huhne Sketch Diary
David Attenborough refusing to show gay animals Sketch Interview
Page 3 girls out of date tweet Sketch Sketch
Newsjack guide to driving in the cold Sketch Infomercial
Childrens Road Safery Advert Scrapped and foxes Sketch Infomercial
Terrorist Social Media Sketch Unsure
Jackapps Jackapps
Old Popes Home Sketch Scene
Gnomes in Chelsea Flower Show Sketch
Wooden Horse Lasagne Sketch Scene
Corrections Corrections Corrections

Will post some thoughts on this later.